And into our inbox she comes!
A nice rejection.
Sorry, but NO.
These things are as much the life of a writer as swimming is to fish; but even the fish eventually got tired of the water and walked on dry land!
Maybe too I need that evolutionary leap?
I’ve been pushing Amy Grace: Thomas Payne.
Perchance it isn’t them and it is indeed me?
Scary, but possible – the statistics would support such a hypothesis.
Page one MUST be sufficient to draw you in, to lock you into a tumultuous love affair with the story – possibly mine doesn’t.
I’ve changed the beginning before – so why not again?
Back in 2014 when book one was known by another name (Khartoum) our opening page was an instant explosion of violence that indeed made Saving Private Ryan look exceedingly tame.
But we changed it.
We toned it down.
What was an unapologetic single page describing the pain and humiliation of a young woman being raped was changed.
Versions that followed didn’t alter what was to happen to young Amy, but they did lead the reader to it, they offered some context, they offered a more abstract telling of that tale.
I know that I must pass the 30-second scan when seeking publication, I must INSTANTLY intrigue the (jaded) reader of manuscripts…
A slow burner I don’t think is acceptable.
The gradual building of layer upon layer of intrigue doomed to survive the cursory glance.
I don’t think I can revert back to the original one-hundred and twenty-one words, so I must engineer a solution, or forever fall at the first hurdle.
I want you to read my book.
I want you to read my book because it IS a good story.
I will improve it’s telling.
But it is a good tale worthy of reading.
So undeterred, we strive to evolve, we adapt to improve, and we plod ever onwards.
Fall seven, stand eight!
Oh, the title of this missive – a ditty by The Senseless Things